For this passage I would draw a couple of boys, around the age of 15 or 16 standing in the back of a building leaning against it, with a window behind them. I would have it kinda of cloudy out and the sun coming through the clouds just a little. The boys would be wearing leather jackets, jeans and black shoes. I can see a younger boy around 12 or 13 standing there looking up at the boys and all of the older boys are saying "common! just try it!" and the younger boy tries the cigerette and thats how he becomes addicted.
-Leni Matava
I thought that this was really good. I liked the way you described the boys behind the building and they are dealing with peer pressure. I also liked the way you described the little details like how it was cloudy outside and that the sun was coming through the clouds a little. The only thing that you forgot to do is connector.
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I like the way that you describe what the boys are wearing. I think that you pictured this scene perfectly because i myself have seen similar scenes, on this topic. I find the part where you said that the guys were telling the younger kid to try it, and then all of a sudden he becomes addicted. This is true because now a days you see really young kids smoking, and you know that they get this from there peers who are older.
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This situation is similar to the role of the stockbroker, who makes money when you are buying or selling. Now the cigarette companies will make money when they hook you on tobacco and continue to make money when you smoke or even if you try to quit. They are just covering all of their bases.
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